Collin!!! I love what you’re topic is on and your icon. Your data is well represented on the pie chart, maybe round the percents next time to it’s more reader friendly. I think you did a good job of telling a story with your notes and sketches, I could see your thought process throughout the slide deck.
Hi Collin, I love your icon and the new information about what you are looking for or trying to analyze. I might suggest using the same colors for your graphs, or don’t vary them as much, the demographic one and the tree pit census might be easy to relate them to each other if they look alike. Unless that what you are trying to do. I found the data on your sketches ver helpful, like 1 pet for every 3 households.
I saw in your note that you were thinking about representing dog and cat population. I think this would be interesting to note the correlation between the number of dogs and the number of tree pits in the area. I found the title of the “Percentage of tree pits” a bit misleading. What exactly are you trying to show? Is this the number of tree pits per mile of sidewalk?
Good, thoughtful notes, Sonya.
Collin, the icon here is very cute. This said, here are my notes on clarity:
+ I’m not sure what Slide 9 can tell me. The headline doesn’t make any claim, so I’m not sure you know, either. Percentages here might not be a valuable piece of information, because the denominator, which is your survey area, isn’t of considerable significance. Perhaps a count chart of number of tree pits per street would be more valuable. I think the absolute number of tree pits is more interesting? But I also have to know what relevance tree pit count has to dogs–you haven’t spelled this out. Is it that you think tree pits are important places for dogs? Why?
+ To this point, Slide 10 is more interesting than Slide 9, but I still don’t really know of what significance tree pits are here. If you’re considering them mini-dog parks, you’ll have to justify that.
+ Make sure to cite your sources.
+ Others here have referred to some interesting considerations in your notes, which might be useful to think about as you figure out the focus of your investigation and the relevance of other pieces of information.
+ Good job with the bar graphs. But this comparison would be clearer and stronger if each category were a comparison between the two scales, instead of having two graphs–try placing the Brooklyn bar next to the Census Tract bar for each demographic. This will also allow you to make the labels on your axes bigger–right now they are too small for general legibility on a projected image.
+ The icon is cute, and I appreciate its use in the count chart. But you’ve used the face of a dog to represent tree pits–not a very intuitive representation. Consider something more literally representative.
On design process:
Good notes. Again, try sketching out the slides, their graphic content and their takeaways before you design them digitally, as well. And iterate on your graphic concepts before wedding yourself to them.
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