The presentations uses monochromatic colors that make the information present itself in an dated style. The organization and placement of the content throughout reads and leads the eye in a left to right direction. The cover page could have done with including a picture of an area in which one would expect to find a public garbage or recycling can. One part of the presentation that I found confusing was the slide which posed two question A) and B) and then has four options labeled A), A), A), B).
I’m not sure I understand Nickoia’s comments about color–I see gray and green here, not monocrhome. But I do agree with her further notes on title page organization and the posing of questions and answers.
Jessie, you’ve put together a very orderly, narrative deck so far. The progression from title page to map to instances and then to questions makes a lot of sense.
On Slide 1, try breaking your headline at a more natural place–don’t leave a line hanging with a conjunction. Maybe ‘A survey of / public garbage and recycling cans’?
+ On Slide 2, given your text annotations at right, you don’t need the key on the map.
+ You don’t need to cite Google Maps, but a good practice to think about this.
Slide 4 asks some great questions. These should be useful in following up through further assignments–can you quantify or categorize the answers here?
Is this all your data? Your captions on Slide 4 seem to denote more data than is being presented here. As I said in class, I’m interested in seeing the raw data if your deck doesn’t present documentation of every instance (though I expect I will also see this presented in Assignment 2).
+ Question A is different than Question B. They, and the answers to these questions, don’t belong on the same slide. Keep each slide focused on a single narrative point. I see in your sketches that you conceived these as two separate slides and two separate points–there is a reason.
+ The answers to both Question A and Question B are provided in terms of geography. This is a great opportunity to provide a key map for each of them that locates the instances noted.
My notes on style:
+ The arrayed tiling of photos on the title page generates this sense of display that calls attention, but the photos don’t actually depict what your title refers to–garbage and recycling cans. I know these are not the most photogenic things, but there is a little bit of a disjunct there. I would say either showcase the cans up front, or keep your photo presentation more modest–photos side by side, aligned up top, with regular gutters between them.
+ Different styling and placement of your headline on Slide 2 from Slides 3 and 4. It can be fine to switch styles if it’s motivated, signalling clearly different content and speaks clearly to a shift in your story–but I don’t think this is.
+ Your margins are a bit unclear. It seems like there is an outer margin–which you abide for all of your images–and an inner left-hand margin, where you’re aligning your headlines on Slides 1, 3 and 4? Not sure why. Keep to a consistent margin–make it clear.
+ What is your typographic palette? On Slide 2, the sans serif typeface fills most of the slide, with the serif face used for the key and citation. On Slide 4, there is bigger serif type on the photos. Figure out what sizes and type styles do what in this presentation (you can always change this later) and stick to these from slide to slide.
+ Establish some gutters between your photos. When photos press up against each other as they do on Slides 3 and 4, they get harder to read–the lines of abutment draw a lot of undue attention, which distracts from the main content of the photos.
+ Text on top of your photos on Slide 4 is hard to read and clutters up photos that are already very cluttered since they are photos of garbage. These captions will be easier to read and create less visual business if they are not situated on top of the photos. I see that this was a question you pondered in your notes.
Mixing black and white captions further muddles the content here and puts your design choices at the mercy of your photos–better to take a singular approach to all that retains a consistent style.
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