This topic is very interesting. The picture in the first slide is clear to express the topic. I like the way using three colors to represent three types of closure, so it is still very clear and organized when presenting 31 pictures in slide 5. Also, the data is complete in slide, but I am not sure if the green and red points means the same thing as the green and red in slide 4, I think it should be noted.
Good notes on color code consistency, Yi Chun.
I agree with Yi; the first slide made it very clear that the topic of this deck was going to be closed subway entrances. The second slide was also effective at specifying the location of the census tracts you were including. I am curious about the consistency of the palette you chose; does it mean the same throughout? If presented verbally I’m sure it would be clear. Overall the layout and order of the slides contributed to the message and made it understandable and concise.
The argument is very well presented thanks to the order of the slides and clarity of the images. Alan has successfully presented quite a bit of information in very few slides; specifically, the final slide displaying the staircases that could be re-opened. Overall, very interesting topic and very clear argument.
The map on the “THE ISSUE” slide could use a few cartographic elements to make it more informative: a few street names, north arrow, etc. would contribute to the reader’s orientation. Also, although I do think the tri-coloured theme is powerful, and I understand that green is used to show the most easily re-opened stations, my initial feeling was that the use of green was confusing, as it is associated with a “good to go” message, despite the fact that these entrances are indeed still closed.
Good notes, Elka. I agree about the messaging that groups with a color choice. Important to think this through a bit more.
Alan, I think your title is ‘MTA: give us more access.’ This should be more prominent on your title slide. Right now, it’s the last thing I look at, but it should be one of the first things I look at. Consider a bigger typeface (thing big–you could take up half the slide with this) and/or a black bar behind the white text that spans the entirety of the bottom of the slide, to provide greater contrast.
I don’t think you need Slide 2. Note that in your sketches, you didn’t conceive of or include it. I think you could use your map of Brooklyn (with Brooklyn labeled) and overlaid on this the map you’ve got on Slide 3, and run this off the left and bottom edges of the page, and we’d get the picture. Get to the point–Slide 2 feels like filler.
The info on Slide 3 is very important to your story. But it’s way too much text for a slide. The bulk of it would also be much, much better on a map. Think about how to scale your map large enough, and make your labeling clear enough at the scale you need, to put the subway stop labels on the map.
The penultimate paragraph on Slide 3 is your argument; there is no need to state this here at the bottom of this slide. It’s the argument your deck will make.
These are pretty good headlines. A good headline stakes a claim, makes a statement, is not categorical or simply descriptive. Slide 5 has an especially good one.
Such rich content on Slide 5, and yet it is almost impossible to read any of it. For a slide presentation, hold to a minimun type size of 12 or 14 pt–your audience is too far away to read anything smaller. The way you’ve laid this out would actually be better suited to a print document where it could be printed at a larger size–something like a poster. You might want to hold onto this design and apply it to a poster if you choose to make one for Assignment 5 (for extra credit).
For the slide, then, could you try to sort your instances by slide? Make one slide for gated entrances and another slide for covered entrances? The photos of these various subway entrances are great and very illustrative. I want to be able to actually see and understand them.
It would be really useful to see the proposed re-openings on a map, to understand them in context. Right now, you provide street corners, but this is too much work you’re putting on your audience. Cut this text and reference a map. This could be a key map on each of the two slides, with numbers on it referencing a set of numbered photos.
What is the QR code doing on Slide 5? Is it a joke? Either way, I’m not sure what to do with it. Not sure an audience would be able to scan it from their seats.
My further notes on style:
+ The black and white/color contrast is a nice idea for the title slide and Slide 4. But I wonder, shouldn’t the street be in color and the closed gate be in black and white? Isn’t it the case in your narrative that the neighborhood is vibrant, but the subway entrance limits circulation?
+ Regardless, think about adjusting your brightness and contrast–maybe by adjusting the Curves to more of an S-shape–in your image, for both the black and white and the color portions. Especially if you flip the black and white/color designations, you’ll want to make the closure of the subway entrance more stark–more black and white.
+ The second photo on Slide 4 looks a little washed out, regardless. It needs some contrast adjustment.
+ Slide 4: Can’t read the yellow text. Consider a different color.
Great job thinking all this through on paper.
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