I really like the title page of this presentation. Just from looking at the first slide, we understand what we are about to see: the title is very descriptive and the map shows both where Brownsville is within NYC and where the public housing in question is within Brownsville. I also like the use of the map in showing the pictures of the pedestrian access points, but I think it would be interesting to see more of a breakdown of the different types of pedestrian access (different kind of fences, open or closed, etc).
Good point, Laura. Some further taxonomy of the different types of pedestrian access could be useful if it enriches the overall argument or narrative.
Agreed with Laura – the title page is extremely captivating. Great use of this image as the title! Overall, this slide deck is clear and cohesive, both through the usage of colors and graphics (map layout). I would love to see proposed pathways, perhaps this is a task by the time of the final assignment? Also, what do access points mean exactly? Does this include signage, gates, guided walkways, etc? Converging the maps would make for an interesting and relevant visual as well!
Great thoughts, Domi. Maybe proposals are part of Act 3 of this story. And yes, it will be VERY important to establish both the terms defining and the significance of access points in making a compelling narrative out of this.
The colors used on the first slide are appropriately eye-catching for a title page. I had hoped the colors would be used throughout the rest of the presentation to create greater visual coherence to the slide deck. Perhaps, as the border of the individual photographs in the following slides, or for lines drawn on other slides.
The use of the faded map on slides 2 and 3 lends coherence to the presentation, and also provides context to the information presented. Very effective!
The lines extending out to individual photographs on slides 2 and 3 are a little messy because of the different lengths used. This could be better arranged by having the photographs aligned to the sides of the slides and then have lighter weight lines extend from the various points, parallel to each other.
Overall, a very readable and effective slide deck!
I don’t necessarily agree with Nur’s concerns over color palette–the colors on the title slide are of complementary boldness and luminosity to the muted grays used in the rest of the presentation. But I do appreciate her suggestion for trying alternate design options for the lines connecting photos to the maps. While I did not have an issue with these lines in this particular set of slides, the variety of line lengths and directions can often be a distraction and worth investigation of some alternate choices (however, I will reiterate that I did not have an issue with them here).
The opening slide is very effective as it incorporates several different elements (base map, census tract, text, water, access points) without it feeling cluttered. I like how you zoomed in and out to create depth perception and balance between the base map, census tract and access points. I find the color contrast between the base map and water is visually appealing.
The pictures in slides two and three have a cluttered feel. Maybe pushing them out further to the boundaries would help.
I’m interested to see if your analysis is going to hone in on the quality or degree of accessibility of the locations you’ve highlighted. Really effective slide deck!
I hadn’t put it into these words, but Jonathan is right–the pictures in Slides 2 and 3 do feel cluttered. A big part of the reason is that there is so much space available on the rest of the page, but the photos are quite small and densely populated at the center. They contain a lot of complicated lines, so they need scale to read. I wonder if you could scale up the entirety of the content of slides 2 and 3, cropping out more of the basemap (which is not adding nearly as much information as the central content), and even scaling down your headline slightly (only if necessary, as the size is appropriate at present) to occupy more of the slide with your content of interest.
The maps on slides 2 and 3 are successful in documenting the number and location of the pedestrian access points. They also raise several questions for me. How do you break up a superblock without extending roads? How do you evaluate access to, from and through a superblock complex? What objectives guide the evaluation? How should access points and internal routes be designed and activated?
Excellent follow-up questions, Eileen. These will be valuable to consider in continuing to build out your narrative, Daniel.
I really enjoyed the way this is represented from the map , the background and the calling out of the housing super blocks very clear and the colors very pleasing. The pictures in the last two slides are a little unclear good idea and I like the way its represented. I like the way the images in the last few slides are cropped, using the rounded edges instead of squares or rectangles makes it less harsh.
The title of this narrative is very action oriented, which gives the narrative energy from the start. The technique of layering maps at various scales on the cover page succeeds in providing the reader with the location of choice for the study. I was not sure exactly what the image in the foreground of the cover page is showing – are the X’s public housing units? The photographs are of high quality and partnered with the maps and pinned locations on the 2nd and 3rd slides, provide the reader with an effective “tour” of the phenomenon observed. Differentiating between “east -west” and “north-south” access points was helpful for orientation. If anything, I would suggest enlarging and spacing out the photographs on the 2nd and 3rd slides, if possible.
All agreed, Michelle.
Everyone has made excellent notes here. I agree that the title slide is very effective. It establishes geographic context of the census tract in the community district and the community district in the city. Excellent hierarchy here: the most prominent elements are your headline and the blowup of the census tract, and everything scales down or scales back from there.
My notes on Slides 2 and 3 begin above, in response to Jonathan. Good maintenance of a consistent basemap and headline placement between slides to keep attention focused on the content that is changing between these slides. And smart move changing the street labeling from Slide 2 to Slide 3 to support the focus shift from east-west to north-south streets. The graphical language you’ve developed for access points is also simple but very legible and very comprehensible.
In terms of sketches, this is excellent work and exactly what I’m looking for. You made a strong choice eliminating what you had conceived as a title slide in your sketch–better to simply get to the point as you do now. I think that the stitching concept you considered for Slides 2-4 has merit and could be appropriate to a discussion of street life or character, and the choice you ultimately made for these slides works best for a discussion of the location of these entry points first and a description of their character second (see earlier note about the somewhat strained legibility of the photos)–but this relates also to our discussion in class about layering and hierarchy.
Title Slide is composed beautifully. The fonts go along with the flow of the map to the green and blue image used as background. It looks as if the area for pedestrianization pops out of the map of Brownsville. The idea is very clearly represented with informative pictures along with a well thought about slide composition through sketches.
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