This is an interesting way of showing multiple information at once with the dual scales and the images in between. The images make me wonder how you are defining “transparency” in your exploration. It would seem intuitive to me that the less transparent fences are, the more it is intended for private use. Is my assumption true for all cases? I wonder if you could show some anomalies in which sometimes the level of transparency doesn’t necessarily reflect the level of private use.
The diagram is great at driving home the point of the fences, but I am not sure if this is really the case of all fences in the area. You could consider adding more examples on this scale to make a bigger impact on your point.
I agree with Reanna’s comments. How are you defining transparency? It’s not clear to me from the photos that these three instances have significantly different degress of transparency. I see in your notes that you considered tracing the fence elements to make the fences stand out more—which would be problematic, as you are doctoring the evidence. If you have a rubric or criteria for a judgment of transparency, it would also be valuable to include this.
Because you have only three instances, and they are so distinct along both scales, this reads as a very clear argument: private uses have less transparent fences (according to your evaluations of transparency). But three is not a representative sample size. Neither is any single-digit sample, but somehow, I think it would be better to include about seven instances here, situated differently along the two continuums, to have a better sense of comparison and to understand the subtlety of the evaluations and the relations of each case to each other.
Great work Lian! You succinctly deliver a lot of information, the colors are vivid, and the layout doesn’t feel cluttered. For the continuum, maybe one thing you could portray are levels of security, with places that have fences that have no way of closing at the “less secure” side of the continuum and fences with locks and latches at the “more secure” side. Also, a matrix could be used to show fence types and what they surround; this could help put all findings together in one place. As Reanna said, the “transparency” aspect needs to be defined maybe as far back as the flowchart; speaking of the flowchart, I am not sure what the colors and shapes mean.
The continuum and the potential matrix could be used to craft a narrative about the use of fences around places. I am still curious to know how the year buildings were built play into types of fences; were Vladeck Houses and Henry Street Settlement built at around the same time, and when were the parks founded? I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Really interesting concept to draw a correlation between transparency and private/public use. I think this is a good way to continue your narrative about fences and adds more dimension to what you are showing. I think I would like to see the pictures bigger, since you do have the space on the page for it. I don’t necessarily see how the transparency levels differ, perhaps there is a better word for it: permanency? thickness? solid?
Either way, I look forward to seeing how this is incorporated into your end narrative.
Some good suggestions here from Reanna, Jonathan and Kate. My only additions, aside from what I’ve added above, are:
+ Go ahead and write out the word ‘between’ in the headline.
+ Text labels are a little tight in the diagram. There is plenty of space on the slide to provide a bit more breathing room. Your arrows might just have to be upsized or modified to accommodate.
+ I still think the background color could be lightened to allow your graphic elements to stand out more.
+ Don’t conclude a line of display text with a conjunction as you do in your headline (‘and’)—break the line before the conjunction. Don’t leave us hanging in the line break.
+ The light blue seems to stand outside your palette. A warmer color seems appropriate.
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