I had trouble seeing the text on a lot of the slides this time around, it seems like a mask or background color was introduced that is too similar to the color of the text. I think the slides that really helped unify the presentation were the last two, the vivid pop of color and the advocacy message really works well together. I also like the new order of the presentation, it makes alot more sense to discuss how crime has fallen in Red Hook and then bring up how there still seems to be alot of surveillance cameras around. It’s hard for me to tell if this is just because the text is hard to read, but I’m a bit confused as to what the red line is for on the timeline, is it just a design element or is it drawing a parallel to the history of crime?
[What are the strongest graphics in the presentation? What are the weakest? Why?]
The two red and black slide at the end of final deck are very effective! They provide compelling data on the lack of evidence of security cameras improving safety, which is a powerful way to conclude your data analysis. The red and black is an attention-grabbing change from the grey, and the type faces, which were sometimes washed out on previous slides, really pop. (Also the dog is great 🙂
In room for improvement, I think the stylized curves of the timeline have gotten in the way of its clarity. It’s not immediately clear to me where to start and where to end, or where the nodes appear on the line. Here maybe less is more. Nice job!
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