The fact that you used the same colors throughout to represent specific languages makes reading through the progression of slides significantly easier than if you were to change them. On the first slide it might be easier to read if the yellow dots are lined up vertically and the rest of the dots circle the yellow dot so that the audience doesn’t confuse the big red dot as a mess up or something. Or line up the red circles, either way might be easier to show progression.
It would be useful if you switched slides 6 and 7 so that you can get the explanation of the graphics before they are used.
Good suggestion about alignment, Katy. I don’t have a problem with this diagram but can see how alignment of a central unit like the yellow dots could help stem any potential misperceptions here.
Comparing G’s work from this week and last week is like night and day (and not only because of the different colored backgrounds). This presentation is about a clearly identified phenomenon, and one that you have gathered a lot of information about. I agree with Katy one the lining up of the circles – the effect would be more powerful if they are lined up, as I think it would give a better comparative context. However, I am curious about the data you use – your labels seem to cover all of the linguistic possibilities – however the percentages do not add up to 100. I think I know how you got those numbers, however, they are incorrect presented as you have done so.
Again, building off of what Katy said, but actually disagreeing a little bit, I think your presentation could be better if you created an even stronger correlation between icon color and language – for instance, if instead of using the “language” icon for your business and community facility map, it might tell a more intriguing story to use the business-based icon, but color it based on the language in which the signage is displayed.
Good point about the numbers on Slide 2, Dylan. G, your title there is ‘Linguistically Isolated Households,’ but the households you detail in the graphic do not add up to 100%–are the remainder not “Linguistically Isolated?” I wonder if you considered including this remainder, even as a grayed out sidelined indicator, and just labeling it well.
I honestly don’t know whether or not I agree with Dylan’s second suggestion, about coloring your icons. I’m feeling a bit of icon overload in this deck currently–there are two categories of icons: languages and program types, and it is hard to keep track of what they all mean once they’re combined on a single slide. You could try color coding your program type icons by language, or you could drop the program type icons and represent the information they are communicating on Slide 6 instead with a matrix, or you could lose the language icons altogether and color code building footprints/parcels/abstract polygons on your basemap while retaining your program type icons. Any of these might work.
I saw a few versions of this one sitting next to G in the lab and I think the choice to center the graphics, rather than zig zag them across the page, was a good one. The colors are distinct enough that they would probably show up on most background colors, but the black really makes them pop. I think you should probably note that the Lower East Side is Community District 3, since that’s how the data is gathered/titled in the census. The title text is well laid out and it was a good design decision to define that title in smaller text directly underneath it, allowing the reader the option to read it without having it shouted at them through a large font size. Are the large circles meant to be off center from each other?
There is so much content in this presentation! It is amazing all of the different scales at which you analyzed the information, including specifying which types of business displayed signs in all of the languages commonly spoken in the area, compared to the types of businesses that display signs in only a couple. I thought the colored speech bubble icons were very effective, especially on the map, at displaying information in a very readable way. The only place where I thought they will a bit hard to read was when they were used as the bars on the bar chart and there was less than one Hebrew symbol. That made it a bit hard to read. What a compelling story you’re telling here! I can imagine viewers seeing this and being convinced that this is an area to visit because it’s clearly so different from the rest of the city.
This is great work, G. You’re definitely headed in the right direction and are demonstrating a great command of visual reasoning.
As I noted above, your icons are fun, but I think there are too many of them on Slide 6 especially, and it’s hard to keep track of what means what. My first suggestion would be to stick with your four primary icons and lose the building types—keeps focus on your central investigation and eliminates distractions by other artwork—though I’ve outlined some other options above, too. Regardless, the information you’re presenting on Slide 6 at left might be better represented by a matrix. And why have you represented your numbers as percentages? I think absolute values would be clearer—the icons on the map represent one instance apiece, correct?
Great and creative chart design for linguistic isolation! I think these are clear and easy to compare across scales, though others here seem to disagree, so it is worth trying some different approaches. I wonder if you tried also scaling your text labels of the percentages? Possible this gets too busy, but worth trying.
On your sketches: This is what I’m talking about! All of the sketches you’ve included here are excellent. Your sketch on slide 9 is well improved by the chart you included in Slide 3. And it’s great to see in Slide 11 that you have a narrative plan for where the assignments are going.
Some more stray notes:
+ “Non-multilingual establishments” is a tough phrase to understand. Try “Monolingual”?
+ Provide a little bit more breathing room between your headlines and subheading on Slide 2.
+ Please include reference to your data sources on the slides.
+ Some of your slides are using a 100% Black background, and some are using Registration/a black composite. Choose one. I actually like the 100% Black here—it’s a little warmer.
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